I am a sandong University student and learning computer science four years.I am reding this message which your recruiting computer engineers from newspaper and I want to take part in your community .

　　Tank for you time And I would take to extend my greatest appreciation if you are so kind as to take my letter into your consideration.

　　Ling ming

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear(空格)Sir or Modam(拼寫錯誤，Madam)(加逗號)

　　I am a sandong(Shandong) University student and learning(應該用完成時，I have learnt) computer science(加for) four years. I am reding(改成read，應該是讀完才寫信的) this message which your(改成youre) recruiting computer engineers from newspaper and I want to take part in your community. As a young man whose(改成I am，否則這不是一個完整的句子) interested in computer science and(加I) spend four years to learn it. And, last summer, I was worked into(改成worked in) a small company as a(應該用an)engineer. I belief(have belief或者是believe) this professinal(拼寫錯誤professional)experience can help me adapt to your enterprise as a worker. You(應該用所有格your) corporation is one of the leader(前邊是one of結構，這里應該用復數形式) of computer science. So I assure that working in your company I will must(去掉一個) be unforgetable(拼寫錯誤，unforgettable是令人難忘的，你不能說是我將令人難忘的) throught(拼寫錯誤through) my life. Tank(thanks) for you(your) time And(and，a小寫) I would take to extend my greatest appreciation if you are so kind as to take my letter into your consideration. Ling ming(Yours sincerely，下一行LiMing，落款謂語右下角) 點評：4-5分主要問題是語法錯誤和拼寫錯誤比較多。需要多背單詞多積累詞語的用法，同時需要學習一下句式方面的語法知識。

　　I am a sandong University student and learning computer science four years.I am reding this message which your recruiting computer engineers from newspaper and I want to take part in your community .

　　Tank for you time And I would take to extend my greatest appreciation if you are so kind as to take my letter into your consideration.

　　Ling ming

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear(空格)Sir or Modam(拼寫錯誤，Madam)(加逗號)

　　I am a sandong(Shandong) University student and learning(應該用完成時，I have learnt) computer science(加for) four years. I am reding(改成read，應該是讀完才寫信的) this message which your(改成youre) recruiting computer engineers from newspaper and I want to take part in your community. As a young man whose(改成I am，否則這不是一個完整的句子) interested in computer science and(加I) spend four years to learn it. And, last summer, I was worked into(改成worked in) a small company as a(應該用an)engineer. I belief(have belief或者是believe) this professinal(拼寫錯誤professional)experience can help me adapt to your enterprise as a worker. You(應該用所有格your) corporation is one of the leader(前邊是one of結構，這里應該用復數形式) of computer science. So I assure that working in your company I will must(去掉一個) be unforgetable(拼寫錯誤，unforgettable是令人難忘的，你不能說是我將令人難忘的) throught(拼寫錯誤through) my life. Tank(thanks) for you(your) time And(and，a小寫) I would take to extend my greatest appreciation if you are so kind as to take my letter into your consideration. Ling ming(Yours sincerely，下一行LiMing，落款謂語右下角) 點評：4-5分主要問題是語法錯誤和拼寫錯誤比較多。需要多背單詞多積累詞語的用法，同時需要學習一下句式方面的語法知識。